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12月1日(上午)托福独立写作真题范文 | 褒奖你,批评你,哪个先?

2019年12月12日 03:54来源:互联网作者:昆明管理员

摘要:12月1日(上午)托福独立写作真题范文 | 褒奖你,批评你,哪个先?

2019.12.1 独立写作题目

When we give feedback about work of our classmates or coworkers, which one of the following should we give first?

1. The positive feedback,

2. The negative feedback.

And why?

写作范文


Introduction


【注意段落结构,整体说来,进展要快】


第一句话立刻进入题目的情境:It is a commonplace that we give feedback about work of our classmates or coworkers. 进入题目的情境之后可以有一些话语作为铺垫: We may therefore get in a conundrum, and, in that situation, positive feedback may be more acceptable yet misunderstood, and negative feedback may be straightforward yet upsetting. Personally, I would approve of the job before I point out the problems. // I would point out the problems before I approve of the job.


Body

If our choice is POSITIVE feedback:


【Teacher’s NOTE: An example of a typical paragraph of the body】 


I am prepared for the idea of the opposition. One of their considerations may be that being straightforward about the shortcomings is efficient communication of key ideas. After all, often, when we give feedback about a job, we are to make negative comments in the hope that the colleague or classmate can improve upon the feedback. At this point, the positive feedback seems to be beating around the bush. However, many of my coworkers respond unfavorably to the criticism about their work if they are not recognized for the merits of their performance first, and they find the negative feedback offensive. The lesson is that we should praise the performance before we point out the limitations, and the coworkers would otherwise feel offended. In light of the above, courtesy is my first consideration. As a matter of fact, not only do they feed offended, they also show strong resistance to the criticism.


【Teacher’s NOTE: However, today, we are introducing a technique in making an argument: Consider consequences of taking the action.】


Para. 1

Recipients are likely to defend themselves and resist the criticism as the immediate response to the negative feedback. As a result of the defensive mechanism as part of human nature, the listener or reader becomes inaccessible to any comments. 【Teacher’s NOTE: Consequence 1】← Contrast → The contrary is that acclaim can open our listeners’ or readers’ mind, making our feedback, including the negative one later, acceptable. 后文blah blah blah略。


Para. 2

As we may often give negative feedback, we may get used to picking onothers, and the next step is that we become fussy critics and annoying.【Teacher’s NOTE: Consequence 2】← Contrast → The opposite case is that we develop the eye for merits of others as we are used to giving our approvalsbefore we expect more of others. 后文blah blah blah略。



If our choice is NEGATIVE feedback:


【Teacher’s NOTE: Another technique in making an argument: Create circumstances that narrow the general situation down to specific cases.】


Para. 1

Negative feedback should be given before positive feedback in the case【Teacher’s NOTE: Circumstance 1】 that recipients of our feedback may misinterpret the compliment as the whole idea of the evaluation. 后文blah blah blah略。


Para. 2

If our purpose is for the recipients to make improvements on theinadequacies, 【Teacher’s NOTE: Circumstance 2】 positive comments, which is the reinforcement of what is done well, may be useless and should be after negative feedback. 后文blah blah blah略。


Para. 3

Sometimes, as a job is poorly done, giving any positive feedback may be a strategy that is too obvious. 【Teacher’s NOTE: Circumstance 2】 This strategy, which may seem pretending to be nice, may be counterproductive and however embarrass the person. 后文blah blah blah略。


Conclusion


【注意段落结构,整体说来,进展要快】


At this point, 适用于多种场景的铺垫句: we may no longer be stuck in the dilemma. 立刻明确重申自己的立场: People are advised to give some credit to others before they point out the limitations. // People are advised topoint out the limitations of others’ work before give their recognition

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