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2020年07月29日 02:23来源：昆明编辑
摘要：作文从6.5分提到7分，你需要这样写开头段！
万篇开头难
烤鸭们在写大作文开头段时有没有陷入一种困境：要么模板化不够新颖，要么重复题目词汇显得单调。想要将开头写得亮眼又个性化却又无从下手。
首先，我们一起来看一下这道题目：
Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.(Cambridge 10 Test 2)
题目问：有些人认为所有大学生都应该想学什么就学什么，另外一些人则认为只能允许他们学对未来有用的科目，比如科学技术等。要求对双方观点进行讨论，然后给出自己的观点。显然，我们的思路应该是这样的：首先要论述“想学什么就学什么”的利弊，然后论述“只允许学科学技术”的利弊，最后得出结论。
01\名 师 破 题
这类题目论述起来可深可浅。烤鸭们应该根据自己的表达水平来确定。常规一些，即以兴趣是的老师入手，根据兴趣选择学什么才来学好。再说科学技术的重要性，因为一个国家的强大与否很大程度上依赖于科技发展水平。
下面我们一起看看6.5分的作文开头是怎么写的：
Recently, there is a heated debate about whether university students should learn the subjects related to science and technology or choose the subjects they like. All of us agree that science and technology are of great importance of the development of our country, therefore, we need talents in that field. However, in my opinion, I believe that students should have the right to choose what they want to learn.
02\点评
1.原文上来就是there is a heated debate about…，虽然本身没有问题，但过于套路化，难以获得高分；
2.上段中重复了很多subjects related to science and technology，却又没有具体化哪些subjects；
3. 最后两个独立单句显得冗长平淡。
怎么改呢？大家可以根据点评出来的问题试着修改一下鸭~
修改后的七分作文开头：
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There has always been a lot of controversy about whether university students should choose to learn any subject they like or only those subjects regarded as useful, such as engineering and architecture. While most would agree that subjects related to science and technology are indeed of great importance to the development of a country and that talents from these fields are very much needed, I personally believe that university students ought to be given the right to choose whatever they want to learn.
对比一下两篇作文的开头，是不是有所不同却也没有很难呢？烤鸭们在之后的练习中可以多多尝试新的表达，尽量摆脱模板的影响，这样才能慢慢走向高分呀~
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